Shadows (Dizain stanzas)
Props and special thanks to Heartsong7 for the tweaks! **tips hat**Familiarity with this Rembrandt Painting is essential to understanding the references to it throughout (S2, 3, 5 and 7).THE POEM IS...
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yeah...Gadzooks!powerful stuff here.The painting helps to grasp the meaning, even though as you say the poem is not about the painting.I'll have to have a few more reads to fully grasp the entirity of...
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WOW! You found some great bits to fix! Thanks! I was aware of S2L8: "Theatre" throws things off quite a bit. I can't elide it... don't really know what to do (actually I was hoping that nobody would...
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fiddlin' fingers find fine fixes for those misbehavin' feet. re: S2, L8:would something like this adversly effect your intent?A sway within some devlish pantomime like drama cast beneath the mournful...
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I think yer onto something there (especially the awesome alliterative agreements )In that line, I wanted to illustrate the moon shining through the tree and onto the wall (the Rembrandt painting) like...
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not so fast, there.Just like a film projected by the mournful moonanother foot long line.those feet do have a tendancy to run away with some lines.why not:like film projected by the mournful moonsome...
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Ok... It was, like, 2 in the morning or something when I posted that! I am not a total blockhead (yes I am... ). Hey, no cop? No stop! (It's easier to beg forgiveness than permission- heh heh).Thanks...
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fiddlin' fingers find fine fixes for faltering feet. that's it!Another couple of reads with a freshly fed brain have left me even more impressed.Interp in a nutshell:An insomniac trying to reach the...
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